Here’s my circle work, worst thing is i’m not sure if any of it is helping?


I’d like to thank you for taking the time to read this, I understand that your time is valuable. The manuscript I’m presenting you with is ‘Kemla’, the first in my part of a young adult fantasy series set in a medieval world. You are the first publisher to view ‘Kemla’ and i will respect your 3 month exclusivity request. I have looked over your current titles, ‘Descent’ by Charlotte McConaghy for example, and believe that ‘Kemla’, my young adult fantasy novel, is both original and fitting for your list. My compressed CV, writing relevent only, reads (i will add this elsewhere i think) …. but i prefer to let my work speak for itself.

The first book begins with Kemla’s story begins with herself and her extended family in hiding however she is soon captured by slave traders (this sentence screams of a six year olds work, come on i can do better than that!)

Kemla’s capture leads the reader through an unfolding of themes including magic which Kemla hadn’t known she possessed, trust which she finds in a slave trader named Leon and freedom which she has never fully experienced in her 17 years of life. Leon takes on a n almost brotherly role, something Kemla struggles with given he is her captor however until midway through the book  when he ensures her escape. Kemla finds herself in a strange land and far from home. Her need for food and shelter leads her, seeming by fate, to Orin’s family homestead. Kemla’s life is still ruled by the scars of capture and the torments of her childhood but now she has a new emotion to trouble her – love.

She takes her time to understand this new world which she has been thrust into, the world of a young woman. Accepting her dark past, memories of a rough father and desperate times, is instrumental in her eventual acceptance of freedom.

Kemla the series embodies many of the struggles that teens face, love, acceptance, trust, coming of age and bearing maturity. The series also includes all the elements to distract readers from their own troubles. There’s magic and danger, struggle and triumph, family, loss and great moments of success. (i think i’ll move this bit up the top somewhere, more like an intro)

Book one sits at ………….. words.

Book two has been drafted at ………….. words and follows Kemla on an adventure into new lands where she challenges social order, learns to joust, builds her magical ability and saves Leon’s life.

Book three is all about family. It currently sits at ……………. words and follows Kemla as she attempts to right the wrongs of her father to save her mother and extended family from a death sentence.

In each book Kemla learns a little more about herself, grows up a little more and dives into another aspect of her world, there’s always a presence of magic and an element of danger and a lot of dancing along the line between right and wrong.

Writing is where is feel at home, I have had success with short story competitions since primary school. I graduated with my HSC in 2001 and completed (part time) my degree in arts and teaching in 2009. Currently i’m working as a manager in tourism and i love both my management position and the time i spend writing.

Please find the first five pages below for your perusal. The full manuscript is immediately available.

 Again i would like to thank you for your time. I look forward to hearing from you.

I know, it still needs work…